Every writer has experienced that moment of wanting to throw the towel in after getting rejected. However, it’s important not to be defeated by the thoughts of the person typically on the other end of your screenplay: The Screenplay Reader.
Getting that ‘Pass’ on the screenplay you’ve put your blood sweat and tears in for months or years can be tough to swallow.
It’s too easy to take the screenplay reader’s verdict to heart. What is important to remember is that a reader will have sometimes passed on your screenplay for reasons that you can fix.
A ‘Pass’ is not the end of the road. In fact, it is just the beginning. You need that ‘Pass’ from a reader in order to take your screenplay to the next level.
So what are some of the reasons that a screenplay reader might have passed on your work?
When screenwriting it’s easy to forget that the story is meant to be seen rather than just read. With that in mind, it’s important to create an idea of how the movie will look.
The screenplay reader needs to be given a strong impression of the visuals of this potential movie. Visual imagery can go a long way to creating a memorable impression for the reader.
It’s a commonly heard pet hate of screenplay readers. Where is the story set? No indication of where the story is taking the place is a rookie error but a surprisingly common one.
Whilst writers might like to keep their options open with a generic location, this ignores the value that can be found in utilising a setting and the context that comes with it.
Similarly to a lack of instruction about the setting, vague introductions to characters waste the opportunity to make a lasting impression.
This applies to the supporting characters as much as it does the protagonist. Particularly within an ensemble cast, the character introductions need to efficiently set up a lasting image of who these characters are.
It’s very hard to get a sense of a story if you can’t get a sense of who the characters are. Make this as easy and as memorable for the screenplay reader as possible.
For your protagonist, their character arc is essential. What is the journey they go on?
A script with no visible change in the protagonist is one lacking in conflict and therefore lacking in much dramatic potential.
Too often screenplays feature a protagonist who doesn’t change throughout the story, an anchor amidst change around them.
Audiences (and readers!) need the protagonist to be someone they can hook onto and visible change is the way to make that hook powerful.
Whatever your screenplay structure, make it have purpose.
Structure is a way of organising the story to best captivate and keep the audience’s attention. It’s therefore frustrating when structure feels disorganised or employed without purpose.
If the story flows without change in pace and tone, then it becomes harder to follow. Similarly, if the structure lacks purpose then it can get in the way of the story.
It might, as a result, feel like a gimmick employed to make the script just feel more dynamic, rather than actually adding to the power and pull of the story.
What is your screenplay about? This may seem like a simple question. But really though…what is it about?
This speaks to the screenplay’s theme. Beneath the surface of the story, what is it saying? Ask yourself the following questions…
From the perspective of a screenplay reader, too often screenplays have no discernible theme beneath their surface level story.
Okay so The Godfather is about a mafia crime family and the son poised to take the reigns…
Make your script much more than the sum of its parts.
Whilst a story doesn’t have to be set in the face of an impending apocalypse, the stakes always have to be high, either literally or figuratively.
Often a screenplay reader will pass on a script because it doesn’t set the stakes high enough for its characters and story overall.
Too often writers don’t set the stakes for their story high enough. A simpler way to think about this is…if the script is posing a question, is the answer worth caring about enough to invest for the length of the story?
It’s well established that conflict is at the very heart of drama. However, this conflict needs to believable and challenging enough to make it interesting.
What reaction are you seeking to get from your audience? This is how to best find your script’s tone.
Tone’s can certainly co-exist. But this speaks to the need to balance the tone in the right places.
Overall, do different tones complicate and subtract from each other? Or do they compliment each other?
Furthermore, the purpose of tone can often be traced back to the purpose of telling the story in the first place.
A Reader will see a mismatch in tone as a sign of a lack of clarity in terms of the script’s overall purpose.
Similarly to tone, who is the audience for your film/TV series? Who are you looking to speak to and how does your script achieve that goal?
What does your screenplay say about the world around you? And around the screenplay reader!
How are your reflecting the world back at itself? What are you saying about the modern world?
Obviously a screenplay doesn’t have to have a strong relevance to current real world events. But where possible, there should be some kind of vision for how it sits within the broader cultural picture.
Your screenplay doesn’t have to say something directly or overtly culturally relevant. But it doing so will give the reader a better vision of how it could sit within the marketplace and culture at large.
It will also be proof that you have something valuable and distinctive to say, worth investing in for producer and eventually, an audience.
Is your dialogue serving a function? This is the key thing to ask of dialogue to make it sure it doesn’t just feel like page filler.
Dialogue always needs to be valuable in moving the story forward in terms of plot, characterisation or theme.
Whilst plot devices can sometimes move the script forward in a dynamic and exciting way if used at the right time, often they feel representative of a lack of imagination.
Make sure if using a plot device it is justified in its presence in relation to the characters, theme and tone of the rest of the script.
A screenplay reader wants to see how your screenplay both fulfils and subverts genre expectations.
A screenplay reader wants a vision of how your script is going to look as a movie/TV show.
You want the screenplay reader to come away from reading your screenplay with as clear a vision as possible of your movie. The poster, the trailer, where it fits in.
Nailing genre and tone will signal these aspects.
Does the protagonist enact change or does change just happen to and/or around them?
Does the antagonist feel a believable opposing force for the protagonist to overcome?
For example, in simple terms, if your antagonist‘s goal is to destroy the world…
The antagonist should feel almost as three-dimensional as the protagonist in their goals, motivations and characteristics.
Similarly, do the screenplay’s supporting characters feel three-dimensional? Or do they feel that they merely serve a simplistic, expositional function?
A screenplay reader will find it hard to visualise your screenplay in the marketplace if it feels old-fashioned in story, tone or intention.
It’s more about how much the screenplay feels aware of its context, both real world and cinematic.
For example, The Favourite seems a familiar period film on the surface.
Is there a distinction between your first and second acts?
Screenplay readers will often be frustrated by a screenplay that doesn’t change enough in its transition from first to second act.
This could be talked about as an ending being cheesy or unbelievable.
You want the screenplay reader to come away from your screenplay with as strong as an impression as possible. A simplistic resolution will undermine any previous good work.
Take time with your final act and the way in which you build to a conclusion. You have time, there’s no need to rush.
For a reader, a rushed final act will feel indicative of a screenplay that doesn’t feel ready yet. Perhaps the writer has lost interest in their story before they finish it or they are so keen to finish it they have rushed the ending.
This is a basic element that you HAVE to get right. For a screenplay reader, it’s surprising how much poor formatting gets in the way of digesting a script.
Of course, writers can break rules. But you need to establish a groundwork first so that any such broken rules can be understood by the Reader within the context of screenplay format in general.
If a director were reading your screenplay, what would excite them about it visually? Too often it feels that writers almost forget that their screenplay is meant to be filmed. With that in mind…
Think about how much your screenplay is conveying motion? Even if there is a limited setting, what movement is present for the camera to convey dynamically?
Subplots are important in keeping the narrative moving forward as well as keeping it interesting.
Even a very strong primary narrative plot arc should have some kind of subplot. It adds layers to the narrative, layers that can be tied together eventually to make for a satisfying concluding act.
However, a reader will see through subplots added for the sake of it. Make sure your subplots make sense within the rest of your narrative and connect to your protagonist in a meaningful and satisfying way.
Remember, the goal is to make your script as easily comprehensible for the reader as possible. There is no use being purposefully elusive for stylistic purposes. Be descriptive and illuminating in your description.
Conversely, your screenplay should be well-balanced in terms of the stage direction/description and dramatic action/dialogue.
A screenplay reader will find an abundance of description overwhelming. It will make it more difficult to imagine how the screenplay will play out on screen, if all there is is direction.
What is the premise that guides the screenplay throughout?
A reader will see through a screenplay without a premise pretty quickly. A screenplay without a clear premise is one without a clear purpose, definition or identity.
What is your screenplay fundamentally about? This should be the starting point for your screenplay and if it’s not present it will signal poor intent to the reader.
Of course, a great premise can still be poorly executed. But it’s the start that is needed.
Your protagonist needs to go on on a journey throughout the screenplay and the screenplay reader needs to be taken on that journey too.
Put very simply, where does the script start and where does it end?
A reader will be frustrated by plot arcs that are raised only to not be finished appropriately. This will again speak to a lack of a clear purpose and intention for the story.
Don’t let arcs trail off or remain unanswered, the reader will notice.
Relatability is an important part of what makes characters engaging. Are the characters in your screenplay relatable even if they’re unlikeable?
Movies and TV can help us understand and empathise with characters who through their actions seem completely unlikeable.
A screenplay that features characters who are impossible to understand why they do what they do will struggle to generate audience engagement.
This speaks to how much visual storytelling the screenplay is doing. Dialogue cannot be the sole driver of the plot, characters or themes. ‘Show Don’t Tell‘.
Readers will often note that copious dialogue, a lack of visual action and a direct approach to the writing in general, makes for a screenplay that feels more like a play than writing intended for the screen.
Whilst the nature of your story might be complicated, make sure that your narrative is following a simple enough through-line. Don’t unnecessarily complicate the narrative in the quest for depth.
A story can be complex but don’t make the screenplay complicated.
It’s good to be bold in the story you are telling and the way you are telling it. However, make sure that boldness, however it manifests, is clearly conveyed.
Don’t take the reader’s understanding of your bold concept for granted. Make sure they understand where they’re at within following the story, rather than them having to play catch up.
A screenplay reader will have an innate understanding of what is actually possible and plausible in terms of production. Therefore, a screenplay that is unrealistic in terms of its expectations of production is unlikely to impress.
This could manifest in a number of different ways:
It’s good to let your imagination run wild. However, make sure you have an understanding of the practicality of filmmaking before you get too ahead of yourself.
Are the themes too on the nose or direct in how they are conveyed within the screenplay? This is an aspect that will grate on screenplay readers.
Your screenplay might have an important, pertinent theme at the heart of it. In fact, if it does, fantastic! This will be a great asset for readers.
Audiences want to be told a story and not given a lecture. Make sure your are embedding your message within a story. The most powerful way to convey a message is to tell a story containing it.
What is the meaning lurking underneath scenes, dialogue and character’s actions/motivations?
Dialogue within a scene needs to be more than just plot exposition. Action needs to be more than just reactive. Scenes need to be more than just plot filler.
A lack of dramatic subtext can speak to a number of different weak aspects within a screenplay.
How would you market this screenplay? Where would it fit in? How would it stand out? These are some of the questions a reader might ask of the screenplay in terms of its identity.
Your screenplay’s identity will speak to a number of different aspects.
Your screenplay’s identity should be indelibly linked to your identity as a writer.
Make sure that your characters are distinguishable from one another. Aside from the protagonist, the supporting characters need to all have a distinct purpose.
In simplistic terms, a group of characters might be able to be boiled down into, for example…The Stupid One, The Quiet One, The Clever One, The Hero.
Linked to characters being indistinguishable is how much their voices feel recognisably their own.
Make sure that your characters represent themselves and are not purely just extensions of yourself. There will be a little bit of you in all of them of course, but mostly they need to be able to stand alone.
This speaks to how well crafted the screenplay is overall in telling its story.
The latter will undermine the potential power and reach of a story for a reader.
Don’t leave your story with no and/or a generic setting. Certainly indicate the specifics of the settings (for example, USA isn’t enough), overall and from scene to scene. Where possible expand on the setting and indicate how it plays into the story.
A clearly defined setting will give the screenplay strength and depth and better illustrate the look and feel of the story for the reader.
Make sure your protagonist is clearly identifiable. If the reader ever finds they are searching for who the protagonist is, this will be a major barrier to the potential they see in it.
There might well be multiple protagonists. However, the principle stays the same.
Furthermore, is there a distinct and meaningful enough reason for your protagonist to have this role?
Don’t make a character your protagonist out of instinct or familiarity. Interrogate your decision making when it comes to choosing your protagonist.
It will be frustrating for a screenplay reader to see a character elsewhere in the story who feels a more appropriate protagonist for the story. And it will quickly undermine the pull of the chosen protagonist.
This is a somewhat instinctive reaction for a screenplay reader.
Audiences are saturated with so much TV and Film that a screenplay needs to show that it can stand out. In genre terms, audiences will see through familiar tropes, devices and plot movements.
The screenplay reader will also be saturated. They are used to seeing certain kinds of stories and certain kind of styles.
So, question the ingenuity and uniqueness of your screenplay.
This doesn’t mean action sequences but dramatic action.
Put very simply…what actually happens?
A screenplay not made up of enough action is one that is hard to see existing as a movie or TV show.
Action is the springboard for all the elements of a screenplay that will prove the most interesting – conflict, dynamic characterisation, theme representation, meaningful dialogue.
This is particularly relevant for your protagonist. What is their internal conflict?
A reader is likely to think that a character without internal conflict is one uncomplicated and potentially two-dimensional.
It’s important to note that this can be dependent on genre.
Internal conflict is essential to making characters complex, nuanced and relatable. This feels a particularly relevant aspect to characterisation in contemporary movies and TV.
Even in a drama there should be some kind of external forces for the protagonist to battle against.
A reader will find it unconvincing for a character to go through a whole screenplay without encountering any external obstacles.
This would make for drama that would struggle to justify its existence as such. After all, drama is conflict.
When looking at screenplays for TV, it’s highly likely that a reader will be looking at the return-ability of the series.
Is this a story that could run for multiple series?
There are a number of ways the screenplay might convey this…
This is dependent on your intention for the TV show. You might just be seeking to write a one-off special or a three part series. In which case, return-ability matters less.
However, return-ability will only ever be an asset for a screenplay.
What are you leaving your audience (and your screenplay reader!) with? Where possible try and close out with an impactful, meaningful final image.
Some images are always going to be better than others. However, a lack of a final image could potentially signal a damp ending and conclusion to the reader.
An image that encapsulates the story’s conclusion, the protagonist‘s journey or the themes will likely leave the reader with a strong visual memory of your story.
Genre-blending is an exciting way to tell stories. It combines multiple genres to create something…
Dialogue is a cornerstone of storytelling. It brings characters to life. Every word spoken in…
Subtext is pivotal in elevating a story’s dialogue, taking it beyond the mere surface-level conversation.…
Crafting a gripping fight scene is no small feat. It demands action, emotion, and storytelling…
Writing a TV show script requires a strong balance of creativity and structure. A good…
Writing a script treatment is an essential step in the development process of any screenplay…
Download 10 x FREE eBooks
View Comments
Yeah. I'm boring. I don't watch a lot of movies.
Very informative I learned a lot from this article and to my surprise as a first time writer I have at least 85% of this information in my screen play, thanks.👍💯
You're most welcome James!